Wednesday, January 05, 2005

The bed

In a darkened room, there were two. One was asleep, the other was awake. He slept in fear of the sunset. She slept to avoid the blinding sunrise that might compromise her sight. He would never sleep before dawn to wonder at the lustre of the breaking day. She will never sleep before dusk to feel at one with the commune. He feared the gradual shift from light into darkness, from elation to melancholy, any symbol associated with it, especially the sunset. She feared diversity, any behaviour associated with it, and saw it as rebellion. He feared transition. She wanted to experience only night and light, ignoring the transition. In his sleep, he confronted fear. In her wake, she dreamt of satisfying equality. He struggled, frustrated. She conformed, satiated.

2 Comments:

Blogger Jessica said...

I like it, too. Reminds me of Turkey and Nippers, the coworkers of Bartleby the Scrivener.

12:32 PM  
Blogger ruefullark said...

You can try to publish this piece in an online journal as a prose poem. Since it seems to border more on poetry, you could consider poeticizing it, though the strength of this piece also seems to lie in its sparseness.

I like the unexplained, surprise ending of how she conforms. It is a very abrupt but not impossible transition from the previous description about her. (The post-modernists who like calling out their own pretentiousness may note how the embrace of fragmentation and the transitions she likes are just another example of conformity within the post-modern community.)

4:12 PM  

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